CHAPTER 27

Roya FetovaRoya Fetova

A Crowd Sourced Novel

Read it here – Say what comes next.

At the sound of the door, Desi Grasso glanced from his computer and then looked again in earnest. A well-tailored businessman stood in the open doorway. Bald. Glasses. Old, yet he looked fit. How did this guy get past the guards? How did he get inside and reach the second floor of the shop without tripping the alarm? The thought of how that might happen sent an instant chill up Desi’s spine but he determined not to show fear. “Who the hell are you?”

The man strode into the office and placed a business card on the desk. He took a seat. Leaned back. Crossed his legs. Didn’t say a word.

Desi grabbed the card. Anthony Dmitri, Investment Counselor. Aon Building. Desi always wanted to move his operation there but Uncle Uomo was too cheap. The man in the suit exuded a nonchalant attitude except that he watched with an intensity that made the younger man squirm. Desi picked up the phone, glanced at the number written on his blotter and dialed Aldo’s cell phone. It rang six times. Then came the recording. Where were Aldo and the other guard? He cleared his throat. “How’d you get in here?”

The man’s eyes didn’t break contact when he answered in a mild voice. “Aldo Gionelli used to be a friend of mine.”

“He had orders to guard the place.“

“I didn’t meet much resistance.”

At that flat tone, Desi felt beads of sweat on his upper lip. He fought to keep control of his thoughts, of his voice. “What’re you tellin’ me here?”

“You’ll find Gionelli and his nephew outside. I’m an investment counselor, Mr. Grasso. My partners and I want to offer you a business proposition—a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity. My team believes you’re ready to be your own boss.”

Desi turned the card over and over until he noticed the nervous tell and placed it flat on the desk like a playing card.

Dmitri went on: “Uomo Grasso is a powerful man but we think he’s old-school. We feel you have the intelligence and business acumen to step into his role.” He smiled. “Certainly you’ve thought about that from time to time, Mr. Grasso?” Dmitri got to his feet. He seemed to do it effortlessly for an old man.

“What connections you got, Grandpa?”

“It’s a rather large office. 9 a.m. Mr. Grasso. Don’t be late.” He walked out and closed the door behind him.

Desi stared at the door for a full minute before he regained control of his thought processes. First thing was to find out why those goons didn’t alert him. He lifted a snub-nosed revolver from his desk drawer and moved slowly down the metal spiral stairs, scanning the shop for this Dmitri guy.

Nobody there.

Outside, all was quiet. No traffic, no guards. He paced around the building.

Nothing.

The night air chilled him and he zipped his leather jacket, then pulled out a flashlight and moved more slowly through the alley, scanning corners, windows, doorways. When he reached the dumpster, he lifted the lid.

Aldo’s eyes stared upward, a look of surprise frozen on his blue lips. The other body lay folded beside him. Desi almost lost his greasy pizza supper. He went back into his office. Locked the door. Sat at his keyboard. Googled Anthony Dimitri, Investment Counselor. The search lit the screen with the name.

He selected the first website. Professional. Complicated. It looked legit.

Ten minutes later, Desi’s hands shook. He poured whiskey in the bottom of a paper cup. Moved to the water cooler. Topped it off to the brim, then downed it in three gulps and poured another. He needed to think this out.

* * *

When he made three blocks from Desi Grasso’s electronics shop, Tony Ferragamo, alias Anthony Dmitri pulled out his phone and called Roya. In a minute, her car glided to the curb and he climbed in.

“Any trouble?”

Tony just smiled. Easy—so easy. This businessman cover worked fine. Watching his words proved the only challenge. He’d done some acting before he got kicked out of high school and it finally paid off. Just like the teacher told him—nothing learned ever got wasted.

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HOW TO PLAY–This is an interactive novel. Tell me what comes next. I’ll try to write it in.

1.) IT’S EASY – Just enter an idea, such as: “their jeep drives off a cliff.”

2.) KEEP IT CLEAN – In general, if it wouldn’t fly in a 60′s Bond flick, then it’s out.

3.) SHARE – If I publish, I’ll list contributors prominently. I take you at your word that all ideas are your original thoughts.

LOST IN GAMES

Many kids today are lost in destructive video games. Their friends are avatars. They spend less time relating to others and develop fewer skills to do so. Many become isolated, especially from the family unit, and deftly block parents from their world. That isolation can lead to depression and destructive behavior. A father and mother are disarmed—unable to bond with their kids—helpless to guide them during those precious years.

At a recent ACFW workshop, the gal next to me asked about my novel. Her level of interest and insight caught me off guard. “Don’t you realize you’ve hit on a hot social issue in the family today?” she said. When I betrayed my ignorance, she proceeded to explain and even wrote key points on scraps of paper. Turns out, I was talking to Pamela Binnings Ewen and didn’t recognize her. She’s sharp.

She went on to tell me that my novel demonstrates an alternative game—a unique method of family bonding.  Because situations and values are acted out at a story level, they are readily accepted. Story is a powerful tool. Jesus used it again and again.

In the novel, the roles are reversed. At age 12, with an IQ of 180 and a touch of autism, the game is Nate’s favorite way to communicate with other people. He plays it for fun and writes transcripts to keep his opponents current with the story. He hooks his father into it—a man that doesn’t know how to engage his more-intelligent son in conversation and longs to do so.

Could you hook your son or daughter into such a game?  It’s both interactive and portable. Lessons are experienced and problems solved through human interplay. It’s unpredictable and that makes it addictive and exciting. I’ve described the simple rules in a previous post and will repeat them here:

1.)    Once an action is put into the game, it cannot be taken out.  The result is a developing story line, which is entirely unpredictable.

2.)    A player functions through the eyes of his character and that character must be present in the scene.  As a result, the player identifies strongly with his character.

3.)    Players take turns and advanced preparation is discouraged.  As a result, it’s difficult for one player to control the story line.

Are you ever trapped alone with your son or daughter, say in a car during heavy traffic? Seems like a great opportunity.

I invite you to comment.

GAMES

How can games connect people on a unique level?

Games are a form of interaction, challenge and mental stimulation.  People play games to teach, for relationship, or just for fun.

A board game or a card game has structure, but some games do not.  Some have no rules.  Think about the verbal manipulation a child uses to get his way.

What if a game becomes the primary communication tool between two people?  Is that healthy? 

In the novel, The Game is a story generator invented by Nate.  He’s played it many times before—occasionally set in the future, once in a while in imaginary realms.  To draw his father into the game, he picks his dad’s favorite historical period. 

The rules are simple. 

1.)    Once an action is put into the game, it cannot be taken out.  The result is a developing story line, which is entirely unpredictable and can spin out of control.

2.)    A player functions through the eyes of his character and that character must be present in the scene.  As a result, the player identifies strongly with his character and may become lost in the game.

3.)    Players take turns and advanced preparation is discouraged.  As a result, it’s difficult for one player to control the story line, or bully the other player.

Zachary lacks a way to communicate with his more-intelligent son on a meaningful level.  The game solves that problem. 

What do you think of a game like this as a way for two people to relate?  What about other games?

Published in: on April 17, 2010 at 6:02 pm  Comments (6)  
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PARENTAL INFLUENCES

How does a mother influence her husband’s negative message to their son? 

This situation is poison for a family.  The father may be abusive or alcoholic.  On the other hand, he may be well-meaning, wanting to teach his son—but he teaches all the wrong things.  The consequences can be devastating to a boy and last his entire life.

            The problem becomes more thorny when the husband has his own strongly-held world view and spends a considerable amount of time alone with the boy. 

            I’m exploring this issue in my novel.  Zachary views life as a constant battle and intends to teach Nate to survive it.  He wants to make him into a man, but his definition of manhood is limited.  Zachary hides his emotions and can’t express human love.  He bulls through life, oblivious to joy.  Big and powerful, Zachary has made it through by fighting many battles.  Nate, on the other hand, is small for his age and brilliant. 

            Rebecca sees her husband’s world view as hateful and wrong.  It’s clear to her that Nate doesn’t need that kind of teaching.  She detests the fact that Zachary is using his time with Nate to teach his world view. 

            What should she do?

Published in: on March 4, 2010 at 11:03 am  Comments (8)  
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