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Comment on ROYA FETOVA – 30 by John Jonelis

John Jonelis — Fri, 18 May 2012 03:38:19 +0000

Okay, big delay. I’ve outlined the entire story. It holds together a lot better than I thought a crowdsourced novel could. But the outline shows what needs changing in Chapter 30. My blunder, not yours.

I plan to put out a slightly revised version of the chapter so we can move forward. Hope everybody is patient with me.

Comment on ROYA FETOVA – 30 by John Jonelis

John Jonelis — Sun, 22 Apr 2012 19:29:26 +0000

It occurs to me that Nate would not think that Frank was in FBI custody as stated in the chapter. Recall that Mahoney created a false trail and his ghost was released and had skipped bond. I may need to post a revision.

Notice any other errors?

Comment on ROYA FETOVA – 29 by John Jonelis

John Jonelis — Wed, 21 Mar 2012 13:24:51 +0000

Thanks for the permission, Bill.

Ann, thanks for the good word.

Jim, I am now in the process of writing a chapter based on your idea. It’s complex and getting a bit long. I need a little more time to work it out.

Comment on ROYA FETOVA – 29 by Bill Blaire

Bill Blaire — Wed, 14 Mar 2012 21:46:18 +0000

I see you turned me into a character in an article for Chicago Venture Magazine. Shoulda asked first. I hearby give my permission.

I agree with the last comment. Bring in Nate. Somebody’s gotta straigten out Agent Harris.

Comment on ROYA FETOVA – 29 by Ann Brice

Ann Brice — Wed, 14 Mar 2012 21:22:47 +0000

I love the character of Nate in your novel. Yes, bring him into this one, too.